VICTORIANA - revised
VICTORIANADoes this clear up the pronoun problem? the time/tense problem?VICTORIANA (revised)He bought her love as often as he couldand kept her from her baser customers.His well-born family were...
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Hi Margaret,The preamble sent me in with too much information. I didnt need it because all the info I need is in the poemexcept for, maybe, an exact reason the man killed himself. But I dont need an...
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Wonderful, imaginative rhyming: hers/mortgagers/furs/customers. I agree with Rick about the sequence. I was a bit confused beginning with "She stood" because it goes back in time, and I did not know...
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Hi Margaret - This is very good except for the jostle of pronouns - it's a bt of a retrospecive exercise to work out on each instance who is he, she, him, her. I don't think you need the intro,...
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Thanks, everyone. I just got home, and have had no access to the Internet since I posted this. Good suggestions, and when I've caught up with some mail, chores, etc., I'll give it another go.In the...
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